The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
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The two pie charts compare the proportion of
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spent by working adults on six different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.
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the majority of
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was dedicated to working and sleeping in both years, the least amount of
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was spent on travel to work. Notably, the
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allocated for sleeping and going out with friends or family decreased over the period. In 1958, the largest proportion of
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was spent on working and sleeping, each accounting for roughly one-third of the total
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(33% and 32%, respectively).
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spent
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relaxing at home and pursuing other interests
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as sports was approximately equal, at 8% and 6% respectively. Socializing with friends and family took up 19% of the
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, 2%, was spent on travel to work. By 2008, the amount of
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spent working had increased by nearly 10%, rising to 42%. Meanwhile, the
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spent sleeping decreased by 7%, down to 25%.
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spent relaxing at home increased slightly to 13%. Socializing with friends and family saw a significant reduction, dropping by 13% to 6%, the lowest proportion in 2008.
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spent on travel to work increased to 8%, matching the
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allocated to other interests and sports.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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