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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #line #percentages #australian #exports #four #countries #information #features #comparisons
The graph illustrates the percentage of Australian
export
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exports
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 with
Jaban
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Japan
, US,
China
, and India from 1992 to 2012. We can see that Japan in
year
period
 1990
import
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imported
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 around 26% from
Australia
,
in
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on
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 the other hand,
USA
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the USA
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import
Wrong verb form
imported
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 from
Australia
 about 12
per
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apply
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centages in
year
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the year
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period
 2000,
Furthermore
,
China
has
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had
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 a
huge-up
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huge
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 in 2012
appromexitly
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approximately
 27% in 21th century,
in addition
, india
import
 around 7% from
Australia
 in 2010.
Overall
, Japan was the most country
that
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apply
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import
Wrong verb form
imported
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 from
Australia
 in 1990,
then
start
Wrong verb form
started
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 decreasing in
1992
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the 1992
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year
period
 with
a appromexitly
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approximately
 22%
then
 it shows to be steady from 1995 to 2012,
Furthermore
,
USA
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the USA
show examples
import
Wrong verb form
imported
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 around 11% in
1990
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the 1990
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year
period
 it
start
Wrong verb form
started
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 decreasing until 1995
then
 it start increasing till
year
period
 2000 with 12%,
therefore
 it decreasing again till 2010
year
period
then
 a light
increase
 in 2012.
In
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On
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 the
othe
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other
 side, it shows that
china
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China
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 didn't
import
 anything from
Australia
 in 1990,
However
,
China
start
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started
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 importing around 1993 with
appromexilty
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approximately
 3%
then
 it
start
Wrong verb form
started
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 a light
increase
 till 2002
with
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at
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 7% and
start
Wrong verb form
started
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 to
increase
 quickly till it reached around 26% in 2012.
In addition
, India
has
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had
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 a steady line from 1990 to 2000 with 3% of importing,
Therefore
, it
start
Wrong verb form
started
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 to
increase
 till 2010 with around 7%
then
start
Wrong verb form
started
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 to decrease and in 2012 it was 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, in addition, therefore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, year, period, import, australia, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • fluctuate
  • steady increase/decrease
  • notable rise/drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • export destinations
  • trade relations
  • upsurge
  • downturn
  • economic ties
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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