You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates the percentage of Australian
export
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exports
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with
Jaban
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Japan
, US,
China
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, and India from 1992 to 2012. We can see that Japan in
year
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period
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1990
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import
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imported
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around 26% from
Australia
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,
in
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on
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the other hand,
USA
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the USA
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import
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imported
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from
Australia
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about 12
per
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apply
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centages in
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year
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the year
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period
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2000,
Furthermore
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,
China
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has
Wrong verb form
had
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a
huge-up
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huge
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in 2012
appromexitly
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approximately
27% in 21th century,
in addition
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, india
import
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around 7% from
Australia
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in 2010.
Overall
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, Japan was the most country
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
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import
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imported
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from
Australia
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in 1990,
then
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start
Wrong verb form
started
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decreasing in
1992
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the 1992
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year
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period
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with
a appromexitly
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approximately
22%
then
Linking Words
it shows to be steady from 1995 to 2012,
Furthermore
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,
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
show examples
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import
Wrong verb form
imported
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around 11% in
1990
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the 1990
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year
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period
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it
start
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started
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decreasing until 1995
then
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it start increasing till
year
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period
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2000 with 12%,
therefore
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it decreasing again till 2010
year
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period
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then
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a light
increase
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in 2012.
In
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On
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the
othe
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other
side, it shows that
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china
Capitalize word
China
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didn't
import
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anything from
Australia
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in 1990,
However
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,
China
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start
Wrong verb form
started
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importing around 1993 with
appromexilty
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approximately
3%
then
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it
start
Wrong verb form
started
show examples
a light
increase
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till 2002
with
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at
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7% and
start
Wrong verb form
started
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to
increase
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quickly till it reached around 26% in 2012.
In addition
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, India
has
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had
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a steady line from 1990 to 2000 with 3% of importing,
Therefore
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, it
start
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started
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to
increase
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till 2010 with around 7%
then
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start
Wrong verb form
started
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to decrease and in 2012 it was 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, in addition, therefore".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, year, period, import, australia, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • fluctuate
  • steady increase/decrease
  • notable rise/drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • export destinations
  • trade relations
  • upsurge
  • downturn
  • economic ties
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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