The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information regarding the proportion of
participation
in (swimming, team sports
, and gym activities) in the UK sports
clubs, over the course of 20 years, from 1995 to 2015. In the y-axis between zero to 60%.
overall
, swimming had the most participation
in year
period
1995 with 50% and then
started to fall down till year
period
2010 with 10% participation
and remained stable between 2011 to 2015, Furthermore
, team sports
remained steady from 1995 to 2005 with 30% of
Change preposition
apply
participation
then
it climbed and reached 40% in 2010 drop down again to be 30% in 2015 year
period
, In addition
, gym activities had 5% in 1995 year
period
, Therefore
, it start to grow up to 20% in 2010 and remain steady from 2011 to 2015. In addition
, we see team sports
are the most participated in 2015, Therefor, swimming was the least participated activity in 2015
Change the article
the 2015
year
period
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