The chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value og export in 2016

The chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value og export in 2016
The provided charts demonstrate
a
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comparative data regarding the
export
earning values, in
billions
and in percentages, of a nation in five particular categories in 2015 and 2016.
Overall
, it is evident that the profits
recieved
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received
from
exportation
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of gems and jewellery reflected a mere downward trend among all types.
On the contrary
,
while
the incomes
recieved
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received
from agricultural goods'
exporting
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exports
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increased the least proportion, and
textiles
'
export
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exports
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over the given
years
witnessed the highest change.
According to
the bar chart, over the given two
years
, incomes earned from exporting
the
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petroluem
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petroleum
was the majority of total earnings with just over 60
billions
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billion
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for both mentioned
years
, followed by slight differences
of
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engineered products' exports at around 58 and 62 in 2015 and 2016, respectively.
Although
both
textiles
and agricultural goods contributed small amounts in
export
earnings in both given
years
at around 25 to 30
billions
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billion
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, the
export
of
textiles
experienced a higher change
by
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5
billions
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billion
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.
Nevertheless
, even if gems and jewellery gained less in the following year (2016), the amount of its
earning
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earnings
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remained just over 40
billions
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billion
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. Moving to the information illustrated
on
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the table, a decrease
of
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gems and jewellery exportation accounted for 5.18
percent
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per cent
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.
However
, the percentages of other segments depicted upward trends with
a
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greatest change of
textiles
for less than one-fifth.
Similarly
, a slight increase
of
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engineered
export
earning
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earnings
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was just under a tenth.
While
petroluem
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petroleum
goods could gain 3 % higher in 2016, agricultural products were exported less than 1
percent
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per cent
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higher than the previous year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, billions, textiles, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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