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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to Job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of Job satisfaction for all workers?

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believe
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 that
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work
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 satisfaction is a key
of
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 every individual well-being, most people
spends
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 part of their adult life working. The essay will elaborate
the
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 key element accounting for Job satisfaction and give accounts
to
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 how each and everyone will be content with their
jobs
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. Being content with one's
work
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 could be justified in many ways
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 as salary increment and provision of incentives and promotion to higher ranks. Most people will remain in their current
jobs
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 if these and many
more
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other issues have been addressed by the senior most in an institution. Workers need to be appreciated which
boost
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 their morale to
work
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 efficiently, if nothing like
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 is
taking
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 into consideration they tend to be reluctant leading to stagnation
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 progress of the company. About 79.8% of people will remain in their current
jobs
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 if
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 issues are treated as urgent. I'm contrast, employee feels reluctant and readily
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 bigger opportunities to
move
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quit their
jobs
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. Taking one's company as your liability will enhance attitudinal change and make one reliable for
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 positions.
Individual's
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 must
work
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 wholeheartedly for the institution to generate adequate funds for
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 increment to come through.
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, you cannot
work
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 anyhow and expect bigger salaries.
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,
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the employee
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employee
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employees
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 may be happy and
work
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 effectively by giving
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 amount of salary and provisions of incentives and regular
promotion
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promotions
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 when deserved.

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Enhance your support for the main points by providing relevant and specific examples. Adding real-life examples or hypothetical scenarios can greatly strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Review the conclusion to ensure it effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay. A strong conclusion can leave a lasting impression on the reader.
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The essay addresses the prompt by discussing factors that contribute to job satisfaction, such as salary increments and promotions.
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The writer makes a valid observation about the impact of not addressing employee needs on job satisfaction.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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