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There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter a. Describe what the problems are b. Explain how these problems are affecting you c. Suggest what you would like the company to do

#bus #service #reliability #area #two #weeks #manager #company #b #c
Dear Sir, I am your regular user because of your impeccable services,
however
,
from
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for
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 the
last
 two weeks your company's
bus
 service has started creating problems, especially
it's
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its
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 punctuality. I have to wait for
long
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a long
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 time at
bus
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the bus
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 station as the
bus
's timing does not match the time on the ticket. Every morning, my
work
 starts at 8:00, and the regular delay by your
bus
 makes me late for
work
.
Moreover
, yesterday I missed my important meeting,
dad
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 showed me
unprofessional
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unprofessionally
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 at my
work
. Other passengers are facing the same issues. As a user, I would like to advise the company to take some steps in order to solve
this problems
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this problem
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.
Firstly
, please inspect the timetable of the
bus
.
Secondly
, make sure your driver starts
work
 on time.
Lastly
, the company must inform
user
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users
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 prior,
if
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 some problems occur. I have implicit faith in you, and I believe you will solve
this
 matter very soon. Yours faithfully, Raj
Submitted by rajwants.1997 on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the logical flow is clearer by using connectors effectively between your ideas. Mention specific problems with the bus service and their impact more explicitly, and divide thoughts into well-structured paragraphs.
task achievement
Avoid minor grammatical errors like 'dad showed me unprofessional' which should be 'that showed me to be unprofessional'. Also, note the correct use of apostrophes, for example, change 'its punctuality' instead of 'it's punctuality'.
task achievement
You addressed all parts of the task adequately, describing problems, their effects, and offering suggestions.
task achievement
Your tone is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for this kind of letter.

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