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Band 5.5

There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter a. Describe what the problems are b. Explain how these problems are affecting you c. Suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Sir, I am your regular user because of your impeccable services,
however
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,
from
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for
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 the
last
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 two weeks your company's
bus
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 service has started creating problems, especially
it's
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its
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 punctuality. I have to wait for
long
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a long
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 time at
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bus
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the bus
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 station as the
bus
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's timing does not match the time on the ticket. Every morning, my
work
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 starts at 8:00, and the regular delay by your
bus
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 makes me late for
work
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.
Moreover
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, yesterday I missed my important meeting,
dad
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and dad
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 showed me
unprofessional
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unprofessionally
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 at my
work
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. Other passengers are facing the same issues. As a user, I would like to advise the company to take some steps in order to solve
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this problems
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this problem
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.
Firstly
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, please inspect the timetable of the
bus
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.
Secondly
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, make sure your driver starts
work
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 on time.
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, the company must inform
user
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users
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 prior,
if
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to if
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 some problems occur. I have implicit faith in you, and I believe you will solve
this
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 matter very soon. Yours faithfully, Raj

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the logical flow is clearer by using connectors effectively between your ideas. Mention specific problems with the bus service and their impact more explicitly, and divide thoughts into well-structured paragraphs.
task achievement
Avoid minor grammatical errors like 'dad showed me unprofessional' which should be 'that showed me to be unprofessional'. Also, note the correct use of apostrophes, for example, change 'its punctuality' instead of 'it's punctuality'.
task achievement
You addressed all parts of the task adequately, describing problems, their effects, and offering suggestions.
task achievement
Your tone is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for this kind of letter.
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