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Band 2

Your department needs you to work overtime on the weekend (Saturday and Sunday) Write an email to the Department Manager: Explaining why you can not work overtime on the weekend Asking for working from home and how you are able to handle that Stating what tools you need for your working from home Try to write a minimum of 50 words.

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Dear Mr DM, My name is Hiep Pham (hiepph). I heard that our department needs me to work OT
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 weekend. From the first day I work in here, I always accept
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any Project's order. But as you know, my son who was born in April
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 year has to take an important Vaccine. My wife is on
business
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 trip
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 Korea. That's why I wrote
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 email to request
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 from home. I can check my task
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 looking at my son.
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 if needed I can show
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 whenever
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Team's
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 meeting at
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 time.
I'm
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 really
appriciate
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appreciate
if
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 you
can
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 do me a
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. Can I borrow your microphone which
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 your front desk
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 That helps me a lot
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 mine was broken before. Wishing you good health and looking forward to your response Best regard Hiep
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coherence cohesion
The structure of your email could be slightly improved by adding a clearer introduction and conclusion. For example, start by clearly stating the purpose of your email in the first sentence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that you use correct grammar and spelling throughout your writing. For example, 'appreciate' should be 'appreciate,' and 'Best regard' should be 'Best regards.'
task achievement
Be more explicit about how you can handle your tasks from home. Clearly state your action plan and how you will ensure productivity and communication with the team.
task achievement
You provided detailed reasons for not being able to work overtime this weekend, which makes your request clear and reasonable.
coherence cohesion
Your email is generally well-organized and covers all the necessary points such as the reason for not working overtime, the request to work from home, and the tools you need.
task achievement
You used specific examples like the need for your son's vaccination and your wife being on a business trip to support your request, which adds credibility and context to your email.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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