The line graph shows the number of newly graduated students in the UK, while the bar chart compares their proportions in five different jobs occupied by them in 1992, 1997, and 2002.
The line chart shows the
quantity
of recent Change the quantifier
number
graduates
in the UK, while
the bar chart gives information about their proportions in five different jobs
occupied by them in 1992, 1997, and 2002.
The first graph illustrates an increasing tendency in the amount of new graduates
approximately from 170,000 in 1992 to 180,000 in 2002. The number of graduates
climbs
up in 1997, amounting to 195,000, after which the period from 1997 to 2002 Wrong verb form
climbed
witnesses
a slide to below 190,000.
The proportion of professional Wrong verb form
witnessed
jobs
chosen by graduates
comes top with nearly 60% in 1992. It keeps
a significant decline to 40% in 2002, Wrong verb form
kept
while
it still accounts for the largest part of graduates
' selected jobs
. The percentage of managerial and administrative jobs
faces the
similar situation, which has a slight decrease from 20% in 1997 to 18% in 2002. Correct article usage
a
On the other hand
, the proportions of clerical and secretarial, sale
and other Fix the agreement mistake
sales
jobs
show the growth. The percentage of clerical and secretarial is the third most
, at 10% in 1992. Correct word choice
highest
Then
, it experiences
a dramatic increase, almost doubling to 20% in 1997. Sales Wrong verb form
experienced
jobs
are chosen at least in 1992, at 5%. But there is a moderate growth to 10% in 2002, when it achieves the
similar proportion of other Correct article usage
a
jobs
.
Overall
, the newly
graduated students in the UK keep increasing from 1992 to 2002. In the meantime, they lower their Correct quantifier usage
number of newly
favor
in professional Change the spelling
favour
jobs
which are still mainstreams
. Fix the agreement mistake
mainstream
Additionally
, more graduates
choose clerical and secretarial, sale
and other Fix the agreement mistake
sales
jobs
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