The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in

 1993 and 2003.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
the table below shows employment patterns for males and
females
in
new zealand
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New Zealand
show examples
in 1993 and 2003. In general, the occupation distribution rate in
this
country has a clear difference between the two sexes In 1993,
services
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the services
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and transport proportion
womanly is
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was
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53% and guy to occupy 22%. Meanwhile, in 2003
this
number has
change
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changed
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is
females
36% and 31%.
In addition
, business and social services in both sexes all tend to increase. With agriculture, most notably is
males
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male
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workforce has dropped sharply
since
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from
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38% in 1993 and 8 % in 2003. Over
ten
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a
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year
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ten-year
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period, manufacturing has
change
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changed
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not big about employment
females
and males workforce with
woman
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women
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is 25% dropped 13% in 2003, man almost keep the same with 16% in 1993 and 17% in 2003.
Last
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The last
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one in the chart is building
females
with
starting
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a starting
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point in 1993 is zero has increased
6
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by 6
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% in 2003, meanwhile in
man
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the male
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workforce in 1993
is
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was
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12% has
drop
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dropped
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10% in 2003z
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