The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the table below shows employment patterns for males and
females
in new zealand
in 1993 and 2003.
In general, the occupation distribution rate in Correct your spelling
New Zealand
this
country has a clear difference between the two sexes
In 1993, services
and transport proportion Correct article usage
the services
womanly is
53% and guy to occupy 22%. Meanwhile, in 2003 Verb problem
was
this
number has change
is Change the verb form
changed
females
36% and 31%. In addition
, business and social services in both sexes all tend to increase. With agriculture, most notably is males
workforce has dropped sharply Change the noun form
male
since
38% in 1993 and 8 % in 2003. Over Change preposition
from
ten
Correct determiner usage
a
year
period, manufacturing has Correct your spelling
ten-year
change
not big about employment Change the verb form
changed
females
and males workforce with woman
is 25% dropped 13% in 2003, man almost keep the same with 16% in 1993 and 17% in 2003. Fix the agreement mistake
women
Last
one in the chart is building Correct article usage
The last
females
with starting
point in 1993 is zero has increasedCorrect article usage
a starting
6
% in 2003, meanwhile in Change preposition
by 6
man
workforce in 1993 Correct your spelling
the male
is
12% has Wrong verb form
was
drop
10% in 2003zChange the verb form
dropped
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