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Task 1: The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied line graph illustrates how many people were unemployed in three various countries
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as United Kingdom,other areas of Europe and Japan over a fourteen-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate experienced a downward trend in the UK.
However
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jobless
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 rate witnessed an upward trend in Japan over the period. In 1993,the proportion of
unemployment
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level
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 was roughly 11 per cent and
then
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 It declined dramatically to nearly %5 in 2001.afterwards,
at the end
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 of the
trend
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 It reached precisely %6 in 2007.
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jobless
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the jobless
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level
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 was approximately %9 in the rest of Europe in 1993.
Following
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jobless
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the jobless
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level
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 faced a sharp increase from 1993 to 1997 and peaked at just under %12 in 1997.(Which was the highest percentage of
unemployment
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 rate over the whole year). Regarding
to
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Japan
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Japan's
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unemployment
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level
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,It
initiated
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peaked
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 at %2 in 1993 (which was the lowest proportion of
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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level
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 over the period) and after a modest rise,It levelled off at nearly 3 per cent from 1995 to 1999.Next,the proportion of jobless
level
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 rocketed to %6 in 2003 and
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 hit the bottom at %4 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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