Parents, usually mothers, give up work, choose to stay at home and look after families. Some people think that government should give them salary. Do you agree or disagree.

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Some people believe that

stay at home

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parents

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who are responsible for taking care of family members should have regular payments from the government. It seems that they deserve it since looking after family is a

full

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full-time

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job and does not include any

time

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off from work.

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with, these

parents

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do not have

time

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for learning

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something new or take a job as they are always busy taking care of members of the family. Not only are they accountable for taking taking care of family, but

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they have to do

house work

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housework

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such

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as doing dishes or laundry. These activities are so

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time consuming

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that they do not have a chance to learn a new skill or have some leisure

time

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for themselves.

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, a mother

who'd

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responsible for housework is so busy all day that she cannot find some

time

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for herself in order to attend a class.

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, these

parents

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often get tired of doing these responsibilities without being appreciated. Since these tasks are routine they can eas6be bored and lose their internet. Paying them on a casual basis can make them motivated and

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they may feel beneficial. To illustrate

this

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, when a

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mother receives money as a salary, she feels that she is valuable

for

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society so, she gets motivated and tries to do her responsibilities better.

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, governments should formulate some policies in order to pay

salary

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salaries

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stay at home

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stay-at-home

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parents

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in order to make them motivated and eager. Since these

parents

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have

been

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sacrificed their

life

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lives

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for their

family

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families

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, they do not have

time

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for learning

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to learn

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a new skill or

getting

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get

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a job so, the housework should be their source of income.

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The essay covers relevant points and maintains clarity in expressing ideas.

coherence cohesion

The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces your argument.

Your opinion

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

288 words

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