Parents, usually mothers, give up work, choose to stay at home and look after families. Some people think that government should give them salary. Do you agree or disagree.
Some people believe that
stay at home
Add a hyphen
stay-at-home
parents
who are responsible for taking care of family members should have regular payments from the government. It seems that they deserve it since looking after family is a full
job and does not include any Correct word choice
full-time
time
off from work.
To begin
with, these parents
do not have time
for learning
something new or take a job as they are always busy taking care of members of the family. Not only are they accountable for taking taking care of family, but Change preposition
to learn
also
they have to do house work
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housework
such
as doing dishes or laundry. These activities are so time consuming
that they do not have a chance to learn a new skill or have some leisure Add a hyphen
time-consuming
time
for themselves. For example
, a mother who'd
responsible for housework is so busy all day that she cannot find some Correct your spelling
who's
time
for herself in order to attend a class.
Furthermore
, these parents
often get tired of doing these responsibilities without being appreciated. Since these tasks are routine they can eas6be bored and lose their internet. Paying them on a casual basis can make them motivated and also
they may feel beneficial. To illustrate this
, when a stay at home
mother receives money as a salary, she feels that she is valuable Add a hyphen
stay-at-home
for
society so, she gets motivated and tries to do her responsibilities better.
Change preposition
to
To sum up
, governments should formulate some policies in order to pay salary
to Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
stay at home
Add a hyphen
stay-at-home
parents
in order to make them motivated and eager. Since these parents
have been
sacrificed their Unnecessary verb
apply
life
for their Fix the agreement mistake
lives
family
, they do not have Fix the agreement mistake
families
time
for learning
a new skill or Change preposition
to learn
getting
a job so, the housework should be their source of income.Wrong verb form
get
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