The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. Image: ielts-task-1-us-energy-consumption-line-graph

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

Image: ielts-task-1-us-energy-consumption-line-graph
The line graph compares the
the
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data collected from the report in 2008 regarding energy utilisation in the USA since 1980
along with
its projection till 2023.
Overall
,we can see that petrol and oil
was
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were
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used in the highest numbers in the beginning
as well as
it
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continue to grow till its future predictions.Coal and gas
on the other hand
was
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in the average use,
however
, nuclear,solar/wind and
hydrolic
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hydraulic
hydraulics
,all showed
least
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the least
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units
in the whole period given.
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in detail, it shows that petrol and coal
was
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were
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in highest
units
that
is
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are
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35 in 1980,
this
figure saw some
fluctutaions
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fluctuations
fluctuation
till 1995,after
that
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that,
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it grew and will reach its peak in 2023
that
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which
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will be around more than 45nimts.Coal and gas
was
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only 20 and 15
units
approx respectively and both saw fluctuations till 2015,
then
natural gas showed
plateau
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a plateau
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and coal use will
be
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increase till 2023 and will reach approx
till
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25
25units approx.
On the other hand
,nuclear ,solar /wind,
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and hydrolic
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hydrolic
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hydraulic
sources were in less in
units
in
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the beginning that was less than 5
units
and
it
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they
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remained less in
units
throughout the period including its predicted period.
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