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The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares
different
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the different
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 sum of overseas visitors in the three change regions which
is
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are
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coast
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the coast
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,
lakes
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 and mountains in each country in Europe. Is it clear that the
coast
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 and
lakes
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highest
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higher
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 than the
lakes
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.
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By contrast
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,the
tourisits
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tourists
was
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were
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 in the
lakes
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 lowest than
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others area
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other areas
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.
on the other hand
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,between
1987and
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1987 and
 1992,the number of people
was
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incresed
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increased
up
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to 30 in the
lakes
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.
However
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,
in
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on
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 the
coast
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,
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the figure
of
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for
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overseat
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overseas
 was
incresed
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increased
 slightly
than
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more than
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others
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.
Firist
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First
 of all, of all,in 2002,in the
lakes
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 area the
acount
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amount
 of people
was
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apply
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incresed
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increased
 than other up to 70.Second of all,the
amount
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number
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 of visitors was
stabled
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stable
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 than
the
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on the
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coast
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.
Also
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, between 2000 and 2007,the sum of the visitors was
dramaticaly
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dramatically
decresed
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decreased
decrease
 in the canyon than
others
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 .
Besides
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,the
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coast
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cost
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 was
incresed
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increased
 rapidly than
others
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.
In addition
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to
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apply
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, the canyon and
coast
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 sum of people was
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approximately
aproximitly
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approximately
 around 56
in
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apply
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between
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this
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the
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 two
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this
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apply
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years 2000 and 2007
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, lakes, others with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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