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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the number of
crimes
 caused by
people
 of different ages and the pie chart compares the proportion of four kinds of
crimes
 that took place in the United Kingdom
last
 year.
Overall
,
people
 tended to commit more
crimes
 from 12 and started to decline after they reached 20 years old when the most
crimes
 were committed. Violent
crimes
 were the most common
while
 public order
crime
 was the least. Starting with the line graph, no
crimes
 were caused until
people
 got 8 years old. As they turned 12, around 50,000
crimes
 were committed, which significantly increased to 70,000 at the age of 16 and reached the highest at 80,000 when they became 20. After that,
however
, there was a severe drop to 20,000 as they became 28, from which the decline started to become more moderate,
finally
 hitting the bottom at less than 10,000 when
people
 became 60. Turning to the pie chart, violent
crime
 accounts for the largest percentage with 46%.
In addition
, the rest is comprised of property
crime
 and drug
crime
, which had almost equal rates at 23% and 22% respectively.
Furthermore
, only 9% of the
crimes
 were in public order, making it the least major kind of
crime
 committed in the United Kingdom
last
 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, people, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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