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The table shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The supplied table indicates the percentage of
expenditure
 of wages on four various options by both adults and children in the United Kingdom in 1998. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest amount of salary
expenditure
 was
for
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music
 which was spent by girls.
However
,women did not prefer to spend
money
 on
videos
,which was the lowest measure of
income
 spending over the period. In 1998,%40 of
income
 was spent on
music
 with girls(which was the highest amount of
money
spending
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spent
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 over the whole year),compared to
videos
 at %17 of
expenditure
 in 1998.
Moreover
,spending
money
 on
music
 by children was as popular as wasting
income
 on food with women at %39 in 1998.
In addition
,boys chose to
consume
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spend
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 their wages
for
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 listening to
music
 at %38,just ahead of
money
expenditure
 on
videos
 and equipment at %18 in 1998.
In contrast
,adults did not prefer to spend
income
 on
the
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electronic equipment and
videos
 at %5 and %1
expenditure
 in 1998,respectively.
Similarly
,just 0.5% of women decided to spend wages on
videos
 in 1998.(Which was the lowest proportion of
money
wasting
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wasted
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 over the period).
Additionally
,%5 of salary was spent on
music
 by men,as opposed to
videos
 at %2 of
income
expenditure
 in 1998.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, music, money, videos, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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