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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Bar chart shows the number of
wemen
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women
 going into higher education in
UK
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the UK
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,
USA
,
Ausralia
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Australia
, South
Korea
 and
France
 from 1980 and 2015.
Overall
,
Australia
gives
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had
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 the most
school-leavers
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school leavers
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 in 1980, but
USA
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the USA
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 became at the same
level
with
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as
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Austrlia
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Australia
 in 2015. On
other
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the other
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 hand,
Uk
, South
Korea
 and
France
 show
increasing
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an increasing
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 trend in the period . In 1980,
Australia
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Australian
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 female
school-leavers
going
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went
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 to around 60%, higher than
USA
 by 20%. From 1980 to 2015
Australia
remaind
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remained
remains
remain
 at the Same
level
 at nearly 60% . By 2015,
USA
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the USA
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following
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followed
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Australia
 and became the
highest
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highest-level
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level
contries
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countries
 at the same
level
 at almost 60%. The other three top female
school-leavers
 were
UK
, South
Korea
 and
France
. In 1980, these
countries
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countries'
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school-leavers
around
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had around
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 34%, 39% and 50% levels respectively.
by
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By
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 2015,
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 and
France
became
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were
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 at the
smae
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same
level
 at almost 55% ,
while
 South
korea
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Korea
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 showed
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an incraesing
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incraesing
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increasing
 trend and
reach
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reached
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 30%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, usa, korea, france, australia, school-leavers, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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