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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in four various counties of Europe- Germany, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in four various counties of Europe- Germany, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.
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The line graph illustrates the contributions in US
dollars
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 to
books
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 by four different countries in Europe between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, Germany spent the most on
books
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 throughout the period compared to all other countries,
while
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 Austria spent the least until 2003 when it overtook Italy. From 1995 and 2003 the amount of money contributed by Germany fluctuated between 80 and 90
million
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 USD before the sharp increase in 2005 when the country spent around 100
million
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 US
dollars
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 on
books
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. The amount spent by France on
books
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 has had gradual increases during the period and peaked in 2001, with 70
million
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 USD spent.
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, Italy too
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had a steady increase during the period, but in 1999, its contribution dropped to 50
million
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 US
dollars
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. Austria had spent the lowest and plateaued between 1999 and 2001.
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, between 2001 and 2003, the contribution soared dramatically to a peak of 60
million
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 US
dollars
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, surpassing Italy.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, books, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • expenditure
  • fluctuations
  • economic factors
  • population changes
  • cultural shifts
  • spending patterns
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • projection
  • implications
  • data reliability
  • comparative analysis
  • highest/lowest expenditure
  • investments in literature
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
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