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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Both line graphs show changes over time, from 2005 to 2025 The graphs show information about mobile phones and fixed
phone
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subscriptions
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 respectively in Eritrea , India ,The UK and Uruguay.
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 they show different figures, they both remain relatively constant throughout the period.India showed a slight drop in mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 in 2011 before starting to rise again by 2015. There is a small reduction in fixed telephone
subscriptions
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 in the UK and India,
while
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 Eritrea remains the same and Uruguay reports a small increase.
Although
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 the UK has a high number of
this
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 type of subscription, Uruguay shows the largest
overall
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 increase. mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 are generally higher than fixed phones over the same time period except for Eritrea where both types of
phone
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subscriptions
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 at the same rate

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, subscriptions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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