The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015. (million students). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015. (million students). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart demonstrates the numbers of
Vietnamese
students
who studied in three
many
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countries including
France
, Russia,
,
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and America over 15 years from 2000 to 2015,
Overall
,
it is clear that
America had the largest number of
Vietnamese
students
.
Additionally
, an upward trend
also
was detected in the same country.
However
, the average
Number
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of these
students
fluctuated throughout
this
period. In 2000,
Vietnamese
students
were only under 2
million
in America
then
increased gradually to 2
million
in 2005,doubled to 3
million
in 2010, and reached a peak at 5
million
at the end
of
this
period.
On the other hand
، these
students
were only 3
million
, and 3.8
million
in 2000 in Russia, and
France
respectively. Both lines show a downward trend until reaches under 2
million
in 2010,and under 3
million
in
France
.in2005. There was no change in the Number of
students
from 2005 to 2010 in
France
.In the following five years ( 2010 - 2015),
Vietnamese
students
in these two countries went up to reach more than 4.5
million
.
To sum up
, the average numbers of
Vietnamese
students
were highly distributed in the American
school
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compared
the
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other two countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vietnamese, students, france, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • Vietnamese students
  • studying abroad
  • steady increase
  • significant growth
  • comparatively
  • percentage increase
  • gap
  • narrowed
  • chosen to study
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