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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts illustrate the proportion of assigned
nutrients
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nutrient
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 elements among the daily
meals
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as well as
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 discuss the potential of being unhealthy if consumed
high
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in high
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amount
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amounts
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of
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apply
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the given data that
snacks
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 and dinner have evident the highest proportion of daily
cunsumption
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consumption
 of these three elements. To illustrate, the percentages of these were at the peak with added sugar in
snacks
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 which is 42% ,
whereas
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 the dinner
meals
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 witnessed by higher amount of saturated fat and sodium which is 37 per cent and 41 per cent respectively.
Furthermore
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, added sugar
,
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 has shown the lowest proportion in Breakfast and lunch with approximately 16 % and 19 % respectively,
while
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 it was at the top of daily
cunsumptionin
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consumption
 in
snacks
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 as we mentioned above with 42 per cent . It is worth mentioning that
the
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apply
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saturated fat and sodium have
showed
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shown
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 relatively balanced rates in both
snacks
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 and breakfast
meals
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that there are three unhealthy
nutrients
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nutrient
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 elements people should aware
about
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of
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 consuming
them
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apply
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in daily
meals
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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