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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »
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So, the highest
percenatge
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percentage
 of household energy used in
Australia
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 is 24% which is from Other appliances, the second one is Water heating which has
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23%,
then
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 Heating and cooling
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20%, Refrigeration
12
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%, Lighting
11
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% and Stand by which has the same
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 as Cooking with a 5% in
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percentage
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 of household energy used in
Australia
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, the
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 of greenhouse gas produced in
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 has a different order starting with the highest
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 which is Heating and cooking
with
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38%, the next one is Water heating
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25%, after that there is Other appliances
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16%, next one is which has the same
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 between Refrigeration and Lighting with a 7%,
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 there is Cooking with a 4% and
lastly
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, there is Stand by with a 3%.
This
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 is the result in
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of household energy used in
Australia
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 and
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of greenhouse gas produced in
Australia
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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