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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words.
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So, the highest
percenatge
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percentage
 of household energy used in
Australia
 is 24% which is from Other appliances, the second one is Water heating which has
a
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23%,
then
 Heating and cooling
with
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20%, Refrigeration
12
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%, Lighting
11
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% and Stand by which has the same
percentage
 as Cooking with a 5% in
percentage
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 of household energy used in
Australia
.
However
, the
percentage
 of greenhouse gas produced in
Australia
 has a different order starting with the highest
percentage
 which is Heating and cooking
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38%, the next one is Water heating
with
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25%, after that there is Other appliances
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16%, next one is which has the same
percentage
 between Refrigeration and Lighting with a 7%,
then
 there is Cooking with a 4% and
lastly
, there is Stand by with a 3%.
This
 is the result in
percentage
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a percentage
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 of household energy used in
Australia
 and
percentage
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the percentage
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 of greenhouse gas produced in
Australia
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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