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You have been in a conflict with a team member about the unfair workload and want to have a clear explanation from your manager why your workload is being heavy. Write an email to your manager: Saying why you feel unfair about your team member’s work Explaining your team member’ performance at the moment Stating your solutions how your team’s work is divided effectively Try to write a minimum of 50 words

#conflict #team #member #workload #explanation #manager #email #member’s #work #member’ #performance #moment #team’s
Dear {Manager name}, I am Dung from
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 and I'd love to share some of my thoughts in order to improve our
team
 efficiency. I have been packed by the high workload
this
 time for our current project
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I have to
work
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all day long, from morning to midnight. I am really concerned about my health to make sure
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 stable performance in the coming time. I feel quite
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 and exhausted
everyday
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.
According to
 my observation, I see the scope of
work
 of
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team
 has been allocated in
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 unsuitable way.
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, Lan is one of our
team
member
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, she is only responsible for planning
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, set timeline which takes only a little effort in the initial time.
However
, the hard workload is building
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case
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, executing
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case
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,
reporting
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and reporting
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case
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 that I'm completely in charge of. From my perspective, to help us achieve our target of the current project and make sure that our
team
 can make the most out of member's
ability
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, please let me kindly suggest a solution. As
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team
 has only 2 people and Lan is quite good at executing
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 as well, I want to do
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teamwork
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work
 for each phase of
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.
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, Lan and I will
work
 together from
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 phase to
execution
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 phase,
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 scope of
work
 will be divided equally
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2
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the 2
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people.
As a result
, both of us can support and finish the project as the timeline
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.
How
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What
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 do you think about my idea? Hope you can consider it to improve our
team
. I extremely look forward to hearing from you. Thanks, Dung Vu
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formality
Ensure you use formal language throughout. Avoid phrases like "a little effort" and use more formal alternatives such as "minimal effort."
structure
Improve clarity by breaking the text into more paragraphs, especially when introducing new points.
sentence structure
Use varied sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
task response
You provided a comprehensive response to all parts of the task.
task response
You used relevant and specific examples to detail your experience and the proposed solution.
coherence
Your ideas were clear and logically organized.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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