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The bar chart shows the results of a survey, in which people in Europe and the USA were asked what they consider to be the most important factor in the success of a business. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the results of a survey, in which people in Europe and the USA were asked what they consider to be the most important factor in the success of a business. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graphs demonstrate the comparison of
people
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's opinions about the most essential factor to make a successful
business
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 in Europe and the
USA
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.
Overall
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, almost 40% of
people
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of
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 both countries agree that how the
business
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 is being managed plays a major role in its prosperity.
On the other hand
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, the data shows that both European and
USA
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 citizens see political situations play little to no impact on
business
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 growth, followed by external factors with only 10% percentage of both nations voting for it. It is shown that
people
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 of the
USA
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 and Europe view the national economy as the third most crucial element to a promising
business
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 development with more or less 20% votes. It is known that
people
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 in the
USA
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 chose the personality of the director as the most significant reason behind a thriving
business
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 with almost 40% of them agreeing to it
while
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 the
Europian
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Europeans
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 think that the
business
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 management system is still the most important factor.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, business, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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