The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
proportion
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of male and female
Australian
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Australians
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with regular exercise in 2010.
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, there was a gradual reduction in
the
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physical activity in men as they aged from 15 to 44
years
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old
then
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steadily increased as they
age
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. For
women
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, there was a stable increase in
the
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physical activity from 15 to 54
years
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old,
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suffered a small drop in
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proportion
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the proportion
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of
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population
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the population
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over 55
years
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old. Generally,
women
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do more exercise than men except the
age
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of 15-24. For men, the percentage of regular exercisers decline drastically from over
half
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of the
population
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in 15-24
age
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to the lowest of 40% in the working
population
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of 35-44
years
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old.
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, the
proportion
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rose steadily to almost
half
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of the
population
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in the
age
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group of 65 or above. For
women
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, the
proportion
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of regularly exercised
women
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increase
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from approximately
half
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of the
population
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of teens to over
half
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of the
population
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in the
age
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group of 35 to 64
years
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old. It
then
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dropped to
lowest
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the lowest
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proportion
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of below
half
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of the
population
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in the elderly
population
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, years, age, women, population, half with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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