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Now a days many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or an organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of self employment

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The working generation in recent days
prefer
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 to have their own
business
instead
 of working for a company or an organisation. There are several reasons behind
this
 situation
such
 as
,
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 flexible working hours and enhanced chance of personal growth.
Further
, in
this
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 we
would
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disscuss
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discuss
 the reasons behind
this
 case and the drawbacks related with self
employement
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employment
.
Firstly
, the youth nowadays, prefer establishing their own work environment rather than working for someone else as it helps them to
exceed
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 more in
professional
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career
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.
For instance
, individuals earning in a private organisation face the difficulties posed by authorities which makes it harder for them to achieve certain life goals in an estimated period.
Whereas
, for individuals with
personal
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 corporation or firm, it is relatively less complex to complete a task and reach a definitive goal.
Secondly
, other benefits
such
 as flexible
work space
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 and
time
 are
also
 notable.
For example
, there is no
time
 limit set to run their
business
 unlike fixed office hours
as well as
 they have a choice between working from home or in a
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.
Furthermore
,
advantages
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 of
decrease
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 in
time
 required for commuting and less pressure from senior subordinates significantly incline people to shift towards becoming a company owner. Despite
of
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the advantages, there are some negative aspects of being an entrepreneur. One of them is facing multiple failures,
for example
, before any company gains profit, they face a lot of losses which would demotivate and mentally drain an individual.
Also
, many
middle class
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 citizen use all of their savings and take loans to establish a
business
.
This
 puts them under immense pressure and a huge debt, which
further
 causes difficulties in life.
Moreover
,
business
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 usually fluctuates between profit and loss,
whereas
 having a regular job provides
guarantee
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a guarantee
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 of
monthly
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the monthly
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 influx of income. In conclusion, there are multiple
benifits
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benefits
 of being
a
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 owner
such
 as
time
 and space flexibility, less stress of
commute
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a commute
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, and decreased peer pressure. But one should note the disadvantages like facing failures, effects on mental health, and the financial aspects to be careful
while
 trying to choose their career options.
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spelling
Avoid spelling mistakes like 'disscuss' (discuss), 'employement' (employment), 'benifits' (benefits), etc., as they can detract from the overall quality of your essay.
coherence
To achieve higher coherence, use more varied and advanced linking phrases. This will help your ideas flow more smoothly from one paragraph to the next.
development
Work on developing your points more thoroughly by providing more detailed examples or explanations. This will add depth to your essay and improve task achievement.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, making the structure of the essay clear and easy to follow.
task
The essay covers both parts of the task by addressing the reasons for self-employment and its disadvantages, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.
support
Points are largely supported with appropriate examples, which adds credibility to your arguments.

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