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The chart below show the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between the 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below show the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between the 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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give
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an information
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 about the
porpotion
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proportion
portion
 of households which
either
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are either
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 in rented or owned
accommodation
 in two countries England and Wales
on
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for
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a
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the
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 period from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
, It is
noteable
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notable
noticeable
 that both trends each other. The percentage of owned
accommodation
 increased significantly.
while
,
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the trend of households in rented
accommodation
decline
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 gradually over there years.Both reached
to
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the same per range
on
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in
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 1971. In 1918,
household
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households
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 in owned
accommodation
was
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were
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 the lowest at just under 30% ,
then
 started to go up
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to reaches
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reaches
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 more than 30 in the following 20 years. In the next 30 years (1961-1991) , there was
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase of about 10 % each year. After that , the percentage of owned
accommodation
reaches
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 the highest percentage of just below 70% in 2001
,
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and dropped to 63% in 2011.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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