You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: explain the important event; apologise for the situation; suggest a new arrangement.

Dear Neha, How're you doing
.
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I'
m
writing to make an apology for not coming on a
promise
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date
due to
an
unforseen
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unforeseen
incident
has
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that has
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arrived in my family. As we discussed to get
along with
each other for a week after my final exams, even I've booked my ticket
to
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your way for
21st
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the 21st
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of July and return on 28th July but
unfortunately
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this
date
has clashed with the
date
of a retirement party of my grandfather which was not expected that earlier but
due to
some
famliy
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family
problems we had to drag it a little bit earlier. I'
m
really sorry for not showing up on
time
and even I'
m
very
shameful
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ashamed
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for telling you
this
much
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late as you've already arranged so many things in advance which has not only wasted your
time
but
also
your money.
Also
, my cancellation has affected your holidays as you've not made any
plan
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even with your family, I'
m
really sorry from the core of my heart. I'
m
ready to pay you back by arranging a trip to Goa for
next
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holidays which are coming soon in next month. What's your plan for
upcoming
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holidays? Will you be available for a week?. If not, suggest me a suitable
date
and
time
according to
your plan,
I'll
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and I'll
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arrange my trip
accordingly
. I understand the importance of your
time
and money but I'
m
really sorry as all the situation was out of my hands. I look forward to your positive response. Regards, Amanjot Kaur.
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To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea and maintain a clear logical flow and structure throughout the letter.
task achievement
To enhance task response, try to incorporate specific details about the important event and how the new arrangement fits into both your and your friend's schedule.
general
Proofread your letter for minor grammatical errors and ensure sentences read smoothly.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is appropriately apologetic, which suits the purpose of the letter well.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are friendly and suitable for the context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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