The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph compares data on the spending on various
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among changed
age
teams of
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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in the UK in 2004. As can be seen from the chart, there were distinct preferences in
expenditure
patterns among different
age
groups
. Especially the
speding
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spending
on food and drink increased with
over
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those over
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76
age
groups
,
while
expenses
on
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the
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entertainment
decreased as people got older.
Expenditure
on restaurants and hotels peaked in the 31 – 45
age
group
and decreased significantly in older
age
groups
. Starting from a low of 6% for the under 30
age
group
,
expenditure
on food and drink increased steadily with
age
, around 11% for those aged 31 -45 and
further
rising to 17% for 46 – 60
age
. The 61-75
age
group
allocated roughly 20% of their total spending to food and drink. The
produces
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of restaurant and hotel expenditures, the 31-45
age
group
led with around
to
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13%. The
under 30
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group
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also
spent significantly, around 12%.
However
, spending in
this
category decreased for older
age
groups
, with the 46-60
age
group
spending about 12%, the 61-75
age
group
about 2%, and the oldest
group
approximately 7%.
Expenditure
on
entertainment
exhibits a distinct trend. The
under 30
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age
group
allocates about 7% of their total spending to
entertainment
, decreasing to around 5% for the 31-45
age
group
.
However
, there is a notable increase in
entertainment
spending among the 46-60
age
group
, reaching approximately 14%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, expenditure, groups, entertainment, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Categories
  • Age groups
  • Residents
  • Summarize
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Spending habits
  • Life stages
  • Childcare costs
  • Healthcare costs
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Cultural factors
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial outlays
  • Demographics
  • Percentage
  • Allocation of funds
  • Consumption
  • Discretionary spending
  • Essential expenses
  • Generational differences
  • Income bracket
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