The line graph shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010

The line graph shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010
We can see in
this
line graph the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010 years. The favourite attractions were the pavilion and the festival. The pier was the least popular attraction in 1980 but in 2010 the art gallery was the least popular. It’s changed over the thirty years. It is a sharp
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in visitors to the pavilion from 28% to 48-50% in the 1980s and 1990s. But in 2010 the percentage gradually went down to 31%. The art gallery was similar to the pavilion. In 1980 visitors increased from 22% to 37%. There was a rise
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% over the next twenty-five years. Visitors to the pier
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fluctuated from 1980 to 2000
then
doubled from 12% to 22% between 2000 and 2010.
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