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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-tim e work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-tim e work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the destinations of graduate and postgraduate
students
of
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in
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UK
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the UK
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 in the year
of
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apply
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2008 who did not go into
full-time
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a full-time
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job
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jobs
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 after leaving college.
Overall
, there are 4 categories including part-time
work
, voluntary
work
,
further
 study and unemployment.
Basically
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 there are more graduates than postgraduates in
UK
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the UK
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 and have
similar
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a similar
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 distribution on both charts.
Firstly
,
highest
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the highest
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 number of graduates prefer to
further
 studies compared to those who want to do
part time
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part-time
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 job with differences of about 1500 graduates, 29665 and 17735 respectively.
Additionally
,
5
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times
highers
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higher
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 number of
students
prefers
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prefer
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 to be unemployed than doing any voluntary
work
 with 16235 and 3500 respectively. On the other
hands
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hand
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, postgraduates who
wants
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want
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 to
further
 study and
working
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work
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part time
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part-time
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 are almost equal with 2725 and 2535 respectively with only 190
students
 differences.
Besides
, only 345 postgraduates participated in voluntary
work
 and 1625
students
prefers
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preferred
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 to stay unemployed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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