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ou have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write an email to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email, give details of the purchase describe the problem explain why you need a replacement urgently Write at least 150 words.

#ou #purchase #email #company #replacement
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that, recently I have bought
the
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clothing from your website but some of them do not fit well, so I need to replace
it
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them
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 as soon as possible. Because of the upcoming marriage function in our family, I purchased different clothes including, a pent, t-shirt, suits and kurta-paijama and all
clothes
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the clothes
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 are well fit except the Kurta-paijama which is very important as I am going to wear them for the main function. The fabric and design of the cloth
is
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 good, but it is just a little bit bigger in size, so I want to change it to one less size.
Moreover
, I need to replace it urgently as marriage day is coming in 10 days, so I will be grateful if I can get my product as soon as possible. I am attaching a bill for the purchased clothes and don't hesitate to contact me
,
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 if you need any information from me. Looking forward to hearing from you. Your Faithfully, Ankit
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Grammar
Try to proofread your email for small errors such as the word 'pent' which should be 'pant' and 'kurta-paijama' which is often referred to as 'kurta-pyjama'.
Writing Style
Including a polite closing statement such as 'I look forward to your prompt response' would enhance the conclusion.
Task Achievement
Providing the specific order number and purchase date can add more clarity to your details of the purchase.
Content
You provided all the necessary details of your purchase along with the problem.
Structure
Your email has a clear structure with a beginning, middle, and end.
Language Use
You used polite language appropriately to request an urgent replacement.

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