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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The shown graphs explain the visits back and forth to the UK for the
periods
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period
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 1979 to 1999
while
 the other graph depicts where the
commenly
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commonly
 visited countries for the citizens in 1999.
Overall
 the number of
travelers
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travellers
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coming
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coming to
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 the residents has accelerated from 1984 to 1999
on the other hand
, visitors from overseas to
britain
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Britain
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 could not be any different
shwoing
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showing
 a subtle increase gradually and slowly in the same years.
Furthermore
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 the bar chart explains that 10 million UK citizens
have
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apply
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visited
france
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France
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 in 1999 with
spain
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Spain
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 following shortly after with about 9 million people we can
also
 see quite
smilar
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similar
 numbers of visitors to Turkey, Greece, USA.
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