The best way that a government can reduce the traffic congestion in cities is to provide public transport free of cost to people 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many argue that the optimal solution for reducing urban traffic congestion is to offer free public transportation around the clock;
However
, personally, I disagree with
this
idea because making transit free in
country
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a country
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like India
,
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can be exhausting in every manner.
To begin
with, there are few benefits of 24/7 free transportation which will truly benefit people
while
travelling.
For instance
, travelling will be less
time consuming
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for commuters who live far from their workplace,
due to
which roads will be less crowded and will be accessible to other commuters.
Additionally
,
its
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a cheaper option,
therefore
, people who are less fortunate will be able to commute easily as well.
On the contrary
, it may seem like a good idea but it
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other significant drawbacks.
For instance
,
cost
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of free transit will
effect
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the national budget, which will be exhausted for
government
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the government
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to continue, and
this
will
effect
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affect
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nation
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economically as well.
Additionally
,
large
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crowd will be travelling ,
hence
, it
wont
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be comfortable for every traveller.
To conclude
, from
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and
example
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given,
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firmly believe that providing
this
service will not be as successful as it seems;
However
, the national budget should be utilized in
construction
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and improvement of transportation
system
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,
such
as roads, or railways systems.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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should encourage companies to move
rural
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areas to provide
employement
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employment
opportunity
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opportunities
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, Because of
this
people will not commute to urban areas for job
opportunites
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opportunities
.
This
can reduce traffic flow and promise equal development in different regions of
country
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.
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grammar
Improve sentence structure and grammar. For example, 'it have' should be 'it has', 'cost of free transit will effect' should be 'cost of free transit will affect'. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and the use of articles.
task response
Ensure clear and complete arguments. For instance, the example provided in the second paragraph could be more detailed to highlight the benefits effectively.
vocabulary
Avoid repetition and redundancy. Use varied vocabulary to maintain the reader's interest. For instance, instead of repeatedly using 'government,' you can use terms like 'authorities,' 'administration,' etc.
conclusion
Ensure that the conclusion summarizes the main points effectively and ties back to the question. The final point about moving companies to rural areas could be expanded upon slightly to make it clearer how this connects directly to reducing urban traffic congestion.
task response
The essay addresses the prompt clearly and presents a balanced view by discussing both benefits and drawbacks of the proposed solution.
coherence
Logical progression of ideas, from the benefits of free public transport to its potential drawbacks and alternative solutions.
cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.

Word Count

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