The best way that a government can reduce the traffic congestion in cities is to provide public transport free of cost to people 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many argue that the optimal solution for reducing urban traffic congestion is to offer free public transportation around the clock;
However
, personally, I disagree with Linking Words
this
idea because making transit free in Linking Words
country
like IndiaAdd an article
a country
the country
,
can be exhausting in every manner.
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apply
To begin
with, there are few benefits of 24/7 free transportation which will truly benefit people Linking Words
while
travelling. Linking Words
For instance
, travelling will be less Linking Words
time consuming
for commuters who live far from their workplace, Add a hyphen
time-consuming
due to
which roads will be less crowded and will be accessible to other commuters. Linking Words
Additionally
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its
a cheaper option, Correct your spelling
it is
therefore
, people who are less fortunate will be able to commute easily as well.
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On the contrary
, it may seem like a good idea but it Linking Words
have
other significant drawbacks. Change the verb form
has
For instance
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cost
of free transit will Correct article usage
the cost
effect
the national budget, which will be exhausted for Correct your spelling
affect
government
to continue, and Correct article usage
the government
this
will Linking Words
effect
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affect
nation
economically as well. Correct article usage
the nation
Additionally
, Linking Words
large
crowd will be travelling , Add an article
a large
hence
, it Linking Words
wont
be comfortable for every traveller.
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won't
To conclude
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and Correct article usage
the arguments
example
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examples
i
firmly believe that providing Change the capitalization
I
this
service will not be as successful as it seems; Linking Words
However
, the national budget should be utilized in Linking Words
construction
and improvement of transportation Correct article usage
the construction
system
, Change the noun form
systems
such
as roads, or railways systems. Linking Words
Moreover
, Linking Words
government
should encourage companies to move Add an article
the government
rural
areas to provide Change preposition
to rural
employement
Correct your spelling
employment
opportunity
, Because of Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
this
people will not commute to urban areas for job Linking Words
opportunites
. Correct your spelling
opportunities
This
can reduce traffic flow and promise equal development in different regions of Linking Words
country
.Add an article
the country
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grammar
Improve sentence structure and grammar. For example, 'it have' should be 'it has', 'cost of free transit will effect' should be 'cost of free transit will affect'. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and the use of articles.
task response
Ensure clear and complete arguments. For instance, the example provided in the second paragraph could be more detailed to highlight the benefits effectively.
vocabulary
Avoid repetition and redundancy. Use varied vocabulary to maintain the reader's interest. For instance, instead of repeatedly using 'government,' you can use terms like 'authorities,' 'administration,' etc.
conclusion
Ensure that the conclusion summarizes the main points effectively and ties back to the question. The final point about moving companies to rural areas could be expanded upon slightly to make it clearer how this connects directly to reducing urban traffic congestion.
task response
The essay addresses the prompt clearly and presents a balanced view by discussing both benefits and drawbacks of the proposed solution.
coherence
Logical progression of ideas, from the benefits of free public transport to its potential drawbacks and alternative solutions.
cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.