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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chambers chart illustrates the percentage of family
circle
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circles
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 in
own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
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 homes and hired houses in Britain and Wales
in
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from
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 1918 to 2011.
According to
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 the chart in 1918 families in their personal accommodation percentage
around
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was around
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 22% and increased
until
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to
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 31% in 1939, and
same
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the same
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 level upto 1953. After, 1953 it dramatically increased
around
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to around
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 68% in 1991. But, in 2001 around 69% and in 2011 it dropped down
around
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to around
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 64%.
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Furthermore
Add a comma
Furthermore,
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 in 1918 hired accommodation family circle
is
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was
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 about 78% and decreased to 78% in 1939 and at the same level in 1953.
Thereafter
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, in 1961 dramatically decreased
until
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to
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 32% in 1991 and about 1% down in 2001 but rose up in 2011
around
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to around
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 35%.
Additionally
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, in 1971 both owned and rented accommodation in
similarly
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 at 50% and
moreover
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, 1n 1918 to 2011 owned family houses increased and hired living families decreased.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • owner-occupied
  • accommodation
  • households
  • percentage
  • sozio-economic factors
  • post-World War I
  • housing policies
  • economic challenges
  • affordability
  • societal norms
  • mortgage availability
  • economic prosperity
  • reversal
  • property prices
  • younger generations
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