The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chambers chart illustrates the percentage of family
circle
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in
own
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homes and hired houses in Britain and Wales
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1918 to 2011.
According to
the chart in 1918 families in their personal accommodation percentage
around
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22% and increased
until
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31% in 1939, and
same
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level upto 1953. After, 1953 it dramatically increased
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68% in 1991. But, in 2001 around 69% and in 2011 it dropped down
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64%.
Furthermore
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in 1918 hired accommodation family circle
is
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about 78% and decreased to 78% in 1939 and at the same level in 1953.
Thereafter
, in 1961 dramatically decreased
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32% in 1991 and about 1% down in 2001 but rose up in 2011
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35%.
Additionally
, in 1971 both owned and rented accommodation in
similarly
at 50% and
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, 1n 1918 to 2011 owned family houses increased and hired living families decreased.
Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore. According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible. Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities. In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries. on

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