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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar graph demonstrates the percentage of consumption of five different items in four countries including the United
States
,Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in 2009.
Overall
, It is noticeable that these countries spent the highest percentage on housing.
However
, the lowest expenditure was observed on clothing and health care. The United
States
 had the largest proportion of bought housing
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 more than 25%,
while
 the remaining countries spent just above 20%.Transportation and food were the second most consumed of products. The ordering of food consumption was the hugest in Japan,the United Kingdom, Canada, and
United
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the United
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States
 respectively. On the other
hands
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, health care was the least consumptions product at approximately 2 % in the United Kingdom, followed by Japan and Canada got the same percentage (~3%), and the United
States
 was more than 5%.
Moreover
, all nations consumed the same amount of clothing nearly 5% , except
United
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the United
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States
 was the lowest around 3%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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