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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The provided bar chart compares the number of men and women who opted to pursue higher
education
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 in Britain and their choice of educational format over a 20-year span.
Overall
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, full-time
education
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 emerged as the more popular option for both genders across three periods, despite a noticeable increase in part-time students over time. Regarding female students opting for full-time
education
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, there was a substantial rise, starting at around 700 in 1970/71 and peaking at approximately 1100 in 1990/1991.
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, the number
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 males saw a sharp decline from 1000 in 1970/71 to just over 800 in 1980/81, followed by a modest increase in the subsequent period. For part-time
education
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, the chart reveals a steady increase for men from around 100 students onwards, reaching approximately 200. Women,
on the other hand
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, experienced a significant surge, nearly quadrupling over a decade and maintaining relatively stable
thereafter
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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