The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now,and how it will look after development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Both maps which are given illustrate the present structure of the university's sports centre and the future outlook after new constructions
according to
the plan.
However
, as planned will not be changed structure of the entrance, reception, 25m pool and
Correct word choice
apply
the
seating Correct article usage
apply
area
and the changing room beside the pool. But, both outdoor courts will remove
and Wrong verb form
be removed
gym
Correct article usage
the gym
area
will expand.
Overall
, at the entrance area
, beside the reception
they have planned to Add a comma
reception,
be built
a sports shop on the left side and a cafe on the right side. Wrong verb form
build
Furthermore
, new changing rooms on both corners of the widened reception area
next to the shops. Also
,the left changing room opens to a newly decorated leisure pool.In the current eastern outdoor area
they will construct a sports hall next to the seating Add a comma
area,
area
and two dance studios along the east corner of the new centre.
Additionally
, expanding
facilities and by means of new constructions they planned to Change preposition
by expanding
be increasing
the number of customers.Wrong verb form
increase
Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore.
According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible.
Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities.
In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries.
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The response covers the main features of the current and future layout.
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