The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The
diagram
presents a
buissnes
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business
district in the
town
of Norbiton, and future ideas of the site. In the large picture, the main difference
that is
noticeable is the addition of
housings
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and public facilities with the cost of the removals of
factories
. On the first
diagram
, it is shown that the
town
of Norbiton is currently made up of
factories
located mostly on the east
side
that
also
surrounds a branched
road
on the east
side
which leads into a roundabout at the centre still
surrouded
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surrounded
by
factories
and
further
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the further
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road
that leads to the main
road
located in the southmost region of the
diagram
.
However
,
on
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the northmost region of the
diagram
a farmland is located
in
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that is
seperated
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separated
separate
from the
town
by a river.
On the other hand
, the second
diagram
presents us
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planned future development of the
town
which shows a major change where all the
factories
have been replaced with
housings
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housing
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and public facilities. The previous
road
is
further
extended forming 2 new branches that
leads
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to the northwest
area
of the
town
used for housing areas accompanied
with
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a
further
branching of
road
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the road
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from the main roundabout on the
northen
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northern
area
of the
diagram
that leads across the river. The
area
in the northmost region of the
diagram
has been added resulting
on
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the decreased size of the farmland to give space for a new housing
area
to be developed.
At
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the east
side
of the
town
,
further
housing
complex
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complexes
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are built accompanied
with
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several public facilities
such
as a playground, school, and a medical centre.
In
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the southwest
side
of the
town
but
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, the
area
that was previously empty has been used to set up places for shops.
Lastly
, a smaller roundabout was built on the main
road
that leads to the main roundabout located in the centre of the
town
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, that is".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words diagram, town, factories, side, road, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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