The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015

The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015
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The bar chart represents the counting of
volunteers
and paid
workers
that
has
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4 categories.
This
presentation is related to
Australian
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an Australian
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town from 2015.
Overall
,
it is clear that
that
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volunteers
had
greater
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a greater
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amount of individuals in other sectors
while
referees had more paid
workers
.
However
, working as a referee could not make an interest in both types of
workers
who were
volunteers
and paid
workers
, people whose attraction directed to that field were 30 and 40 respectively. When the count of
volunteers
for coaching was more than 70, the number of people who work for money, in
this
field was only 45. In the therapist sector, the difference between paid and free
workers
was 2 people and they were counted as 40 and 42.
Moreover
,
workers
in other sections were 58
volunteers
and 48 paid
workers
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words volunteers, workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • volunteers
  • paid workers
  • roles
  • sports sector
  • Australian town
  • duties
  • motivations
  • significance
  • contribution
  • professionalism
  • specialization
  • sustainability
  • distribution
  • trends
  • volunteerism
  • community engagement
  • professional development
  • accessibility
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