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The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie graphs show differences in Chinese
household
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 spending in four essential
categories
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. These
categories
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 are marked as percentages of total spending, with differences in spending for 1995 and 2011.
Food
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 and clothing remained the largest
categories
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 in
both
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 years, with
medicine
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 and
household
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 goods remaining the smallest.
Nonetheless
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, there were measurable changes in all four
categories
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 over the years. Changes to the
household
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 budget shares of
food
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 and
medicine
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 were particularly noticeable.
Both
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 of the top two
categories
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, clothing and
food
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, shrank during
this
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 16-year period. Clothing lost just 1% of its share, going from 19% to 18%,
while
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food
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 dropped more dramatically, starting at 68% but losing 9 points of share by 2011. In
both
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 1995 and 2011,
medicine
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 and
household
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 goods represented the lowest and second-lowest spending
categories
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, respectively. Still,
both
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 gained a larger share of
household
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 spending in China by 2011.
Medicine
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 jumped 7 points from 4% to 11%,
while
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household
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 goods made a smaller but
still-noticeable
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still noticeable
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 increase from 9 to 12 percent.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, categories, food, both, medicine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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