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The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie graphs show differences in Chinese
household
 spending in four essential
categories
. These
categories
 are marked as percentages of total spending, with differences in spending for 1995 and 2011.
Food
 and clothing remained the largest
categories
 in
both
 years, with
medicine
 and
household
 goods remaining the smallest.
Nonetheless
, there were measurable changes in all four
categories
 over the years. Changes to the
household
 budget shares of
food
 and
medicine
 were particularly noticeable.
Both
 of the top two
categories
, clothing and
food
, shrank during
this
 16-year period. Clothing lost just 1% of its share, going from 19% to 18%,
while
food
 dropped more dramatically, starting at 68% but losing 9 points of share by 2011. In
both
 1995 and 2011,
medicine
 and
household
 goods represented the lowest and second-lowest spending
categories
, respectively. Still,
both
 gained a larger share of
household
 spending in China by 2011.
Medicine
 jumped 7 points from 4% to 11%,
while
household
 goods made a smaller but
still-noticeable
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 increase from 9 to 12 percent.
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