Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?
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Additionally
, the Linking Words
pollution
law should be legislated.
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statement is that increasing the petrol Linking Words
price
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traffic
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pollution
issue effectively. Some Use synonyms
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Additionally
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pollution
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is
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price
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task response
While your essay communicates your stance on the prompt, it would benefit from expanding on arguments with more specific details and examples. Detailed explanations strengthen your position and improve clarity. For instance, providing statistics or anecdotes about public transportation in places where it is successful would solidify your points.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, improve transitions between ideas. For example, instead of 'Additionally, traffic is not the main reason to causes pollution issue,' a more cohesive link would be 'Moreover, it is important to consider that traffic is not the sole contributor to pollution.' Smooth transitions help the reader follow your argument.
introduction conclusion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your argument.
task response
You provide alternative solutions to the problem presented, which shows depth in your response to the task.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.