Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Nowadays,
traffic
jam causes many problems including
pollution
. Some
people
argue that the way to solve problems is to increase the gasoline
price
. In
this
essay, I will argue that I do not agree with
this
statement.
Due to
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, there are two ideas that I think can solve problems. One is public
transportation
is one of
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that can solve
this
problem on
traffic
problem.
Additionally
, the
pollution
law should be legislated. The main reason that I do not agree with
this
statement is that increasing the petrol
price
will not solve the
traffic
and
pollution
issue effectively. Some
people
use
private cars because they are not uncomfortable with public
transportation
.
For example
, the majority of
people
in Thailand decide to
use
their own car because public
transportation
is not available promptly. So, the increase in petrol
price
will not encourage
people
to not
use
private cars.
Nevertheless
, the government should thoroughly provide public
transportation
to encourage
people
who
use
private cars.
Additionally
,
traffic
is not the main reason to causes
pollution
issue. In my point of view, there are many factors that cause air
pollution
such
as modern manufacturing or waste incineration. The governments should legislate air
pollution
law which is a public law that can cure the
pollution
crisis.
To sum up
, measures that can fix both
traffic
and
pollution
issues
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not increasing the gasoline
price
but the government should legislate air
pollution
laws and encourage
people
to
use
public
transportation
.
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task response
While your essay communicates your stance on the prompt, it would benefit from expanding on arguments with more specific details and examples. Detailed explanations strengthen your position and improve clarity. For instance, providing statistics or anecdotes about public transportation in places where it is successful would solidify your points.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, improve transitions between ideas. For example, instead of 'Additionally, traffic is not the main reason to causes pollution issue,' a more cohesive link would be 'Moreover, it is important to consider that traffic is not the sole contributor to pollution.' Smooth transitions help the reader follow your argument.
introduction conclusion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your argument.
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You provide alternative solutions to the problem presented, which shows depth in your response to the task.

Word Count

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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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