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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provides information about the number of British people’s
further
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education
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due to
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 periods whether they were studying full-time or part-time. It can be seen that both men and women study more in part-time
education
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, but the full-time
education
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 rates are lower. In 1970, male students who chose part-time
education
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 rate were at 1000 and the full-time rate was below 200. And choosing part-time decreased from 1000 to about 850, and the full-time a little bit increased.
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, the part-time rate increased to approximately 900, and full-time
education
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also
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 increased to over 200. Female students choosing part-time
education
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 increased constantly till the end of the 1990s. In 1970 the part-time rates increased by 650, 800, and 1100 respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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