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Mrs Barrette, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter •Suggest how you could help her in her home •say why you would like to do this work •explain when you will and will not be available Write at least 150 words

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Dear Mrs Barrette, I am Lovely Sing, I saw your advertisement in today's newspaper that you are looking for someone to help you
in
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 home for a few hours a day next summer. I am writing
this
 letter to show my interest in helping you
in
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this
 work. I am working in IT company from 2 to 10. That's why I have a lot of spare time in the morning time and can help you every day for 3 to 4 hours. As I am local here. 'If you want to find a new home' in that case
also
 I can help you. Even from arranging the cleaning till
furniturs
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furniture
, I will be there. I know all the local shops to buy daily groceries at the correct price. I
also
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help
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 you with introducing the culture of
this
 city with
their
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its
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 festivals. I can help you to manage to
joining
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 local clubs to make new friends. I can help you with everything
want
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you want. Just let me know in which month you are going to travel and
according to
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 I will make the necessary arrangements for you. Thank you in advance. Regards, Lovely Sing.
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task achievement
Make sure to review your letter for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to improve clarity and readability.
coherence cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph discussing a single main idea.
coherence cohesion
Use more transitional phrases to improve the flow between your points and make the letter easier to follow.
task achievement
You provided specific examples of how you can help, which strengthens your application.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing were appropriate and polite.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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