The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts demonstrate the location and
type
choices of dance
classes of young people
in a town of
Australia. The choices of location include private Change preposition
in
studios
, college-based studios
, school halls
(after-school), and community halls
& other
, Fix the agreement mistake
others
while
the choices of type
contain ballet
, tap, and modern.
According to
the first chart, 2 percent
less than half of Change the spelling
per cent
people
choose to attend the
Correct article usage
apply
dance
classes in private studios
, accounting for the largest proportion. In the meantime, school halls
(after-school) takes
nearly a quarter of the total, and community Correct subject-verb agreement
take
halls
& other takes 18%. In the
contrast, college-based Correct article usage
apply
studios
is
the least popular option, occupying only 10%.
As the second chart shows, as Change the verb form
are
people
grow older, their choice is reversed. In the group that age under 11, the most popular type
of dance
class is ballet
, occupying nearly 50%, while
the
modern Correct article usage
apply
dance
is the least popular one, only takes
a quarter. The story for the age between 11 and 16 is totally different, approximately half of the Wrong verb form
taking
people
choose modern dance
while
only a quarter of them choose ballet
.
In conclusion, more people
prefer to attend dnace
classes in private Correct your spelling
dance
studios
, and it's completely opposite when it comes to the relationship between the type
of dance
class people
choose and the
age, children prefer to choose Change the word
their
ballet
and teenagers prefer to choose modern dance
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