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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph illustrates the exportation of Australia with Japan,
US
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,
China
, and India between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
, it can be noted that there was a significant upward of Australian
export
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exports
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 with
China
 continually without any
falling
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 when we compare it of others three
countries
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other countries
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 through the same period. In 1995,
it is clear that
 Japan and
US
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the US
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 had a sharp decline around 20% and 9% respectively, unlike
China
 which increased gradually and reached about 2%. On the other side, India remained in the same line during
this
 year. Moving to 2010, as the graph shows,
China
 had
a
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apply
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quick growth and reached
to
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it's
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its
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 highest point roughly 25%.
Also
, India went up to
arrive
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reach
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it's
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its
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 peak near
of
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apply
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8%.
While
,
other
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the other
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 two countries went down, almost 17% for Japan before it remained stable to the end of
this
 period, and about 5% for
US
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the US
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 before it
rocket
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rocketed
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 again
at the end
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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