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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The two graphs illustrate how the UK, India, Uruguay, and
Eritrea
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 subscribed to two different phone lines over a period of 10 years.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the United Kingdom had the highest figures on mobile phones and fixed
telephone
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 subscriptions, with fluctuations in other countries. The number of people who subscribed to mobile phones in the UK stood at a hundred and had a positive trend towards the end of the year.
This
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 compared to the fixed
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 users stood at around 59 and fell towards 52
at the end
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 of the year.
However
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, Uruguay started with 48 and rose dramatically to hit a peak of 170, which
then
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 dropped to 150 in 2015.
Whereas
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 in Uruguay, it was at 32 and maintained the same level towards the end.
On the other hand
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,
Eritrea
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 and India began with low figures. Indians who subscribed to mobile phones increased significantly to around 80, but
Eritrea
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 stayed the same.
In contrast
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, fixed
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 users
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 dropped slightly for India and rose for
Eritrea
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Vocabulary: Replace the words eritrea, telephone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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