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Band 4.5

Government should invest in teaching science subjects rather than other sunjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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it is argued that
govenments'
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governments'
investements
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investments
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science
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courses
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such
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physics
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 more than other
courses
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, so their countries can improve fast.
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 statement because learning sciences is the key to
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 any country, and it makes
people
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 more
intelligence
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 and they can develop their ideas easily. the government has to focus on
science
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 education because it is essential for their development.
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 will make them find a solution for any problem, so they can solve
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 without barriers.
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, learning
physics
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 helps individuals in
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.
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developing
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 they do not focus on studying sciences for that they are
stuggling
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struggling
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 improve their countries. Another
reasons
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 why investing in education
science
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courses
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more
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 important than
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 else is
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 will make individuals more
intelligence
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. If students learn more
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 maths and similar subjects, they will be smarter than other students who do not study these subjects. So when the
govenment
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government
 funds these
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, their society's
people
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 will be smart,
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 a result, their country will improve rapidly and their problems will
reduce
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, a recent
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survey
 found that a score
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QA
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the QA
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 test was high
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that schools provided more
science
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 subjects like biology and
physics
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. In conclusion, The
govenment
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government
have
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 to fund teaching
science
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 because
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 will improve their country and increase the rate of
intelligence
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people
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the
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society. It is recommended that
people
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aware
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about
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 how important to study biology ,maths and
physics
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 so they can enjoy
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it
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Coherence
While the essay offers a good introduction and conclusion, it stands to benefit from more clearly structured and logically connected paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a clear main point supported by relevant examples and further explanation.
Task Response
The central argument is presented and supported in a general sense. However, to make a stronger case, include more specific examples and develop your ideas further. For instance, elaborate on how exactly science education contributes to societal progress.
Language Use
There are a few grammatical errors and spelling mistakes that need correction. Ensuring grammatical accuracy will improve the clarity and readability of your essay.
Task Response
The essay clearly states its position on the argument from the outset.
Coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present and serve their purposes well by setting up and wrapping up the discussion.

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