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The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B + ) in respective courses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B + ) in respective courses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provides data about the percentage of grade achievement in a school between male and female
students
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,in which the grades consist of A and B+ in selective subjects,namely Physics, Chemistry, History, Geography, Foreign
languages
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, Mathematics, and
computer
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science
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.
Overall
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, most of the subjects were outstanding achieved by girls in comparison to boys, with the highest ratio of accomplishment was
computer
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science
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 study,followed by Math and Overseas
languages
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while
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 most the girls might not be good at Geography
due to
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 the smallest proportion of the total. Regarding male
students
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, almost half of them are good at Math and
languages
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.
On the other hand
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,they obtained the lowest result ratio in Chemistry. As far as the boys are concerned, the young boy
students
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 gain a better grade in only Geography compared to the girls' outcome, standing at approximately 30%
whereas
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 the schoolgirl achieved great grades at just over one-fifth.
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, male
students
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 are good at Math,
Languages
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, and
computer
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science
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 at the top three highest levels with 48%,46% and 42%,respectively.
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,the highest percentage of studies in
computer
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science
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 with regards to female
students
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,followed by 49% in numerical subjects and 47% in
languages
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, computer, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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