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The line graph ilustrates the consumption of three various kinds of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990.

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The line graph
ilustrates
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illustrates
 the consumption of three various kinds of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. 
Overall
, it can be pointed out from the line graph that, fish and chips were the
maximim
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maximum
while
pizza
 was minimal over the given period. 
According to
 the line graph
that
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,
Hamburger
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Hamburgers
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was
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started at the
the
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lowest point close to zero in 1970 but it jumped up
the
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to three hundred in 1990. In comparison,
pizza
 was three hundred
begining
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beginning
 of the
1970
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1970s
 a bit later two hundred in 1985. It stayed
stabilily
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stability
 between 1985-1990. It is
vivid
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 from the chart that, fish and chips began below a hundred
grew
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and grew
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 up to 500 which the food did not stay any flexeblity from 1970 to 1990. 
In addition
, Fish and Chips were two hundred grams more than
Pizza
 and Hamburger. Even
dicreasing
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decreasing
 point of the
Pizza
 with increasing of the Hamburger in 1987
with in
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within
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teractinh
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interacting
 each other.
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introduction conclusion present
Work on creating a clear and comprehensive introduction and conclusion to frame your analysis better. Ensure your introduction outlines what the graph displays, and your conclusion summarizes the key points and overall trends.
logical structure
Improve logical structure by connecting your points more smoothly. Use linking words and phrases to ensure the essay flows naturally from one idea to the next.
supported main points
Use more specific data points from the graph to strengthen your examples. This will help to support your points more effectively and demonstrate your understanding of the data.
clear comprehensive ideas
Double-check for spelling and grammatical errors, and ensure your language is precise and clear to convey your ideas effectively.
overall structure
Overall structure of the essay is clear, with distinct paragraphs describing different aspects of the graph.
task response
The essay provides a good attempt to describe the trends and patterns in the line graph.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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