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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
charts
 illustrate the share of various fuel sources for producing electricity in
France
 and
Australia
 in 1980 and 2000. It can be clearly seen that in
Australia
, coal was the main source both in 1980 and 2000. Looking at the pie
charts
 related to
Australia
 it is evident that the
rate
 of using coal for electricity production significantly increased from 50
units
 in 1980 to 130
units
 in 2000.
Conversely
, the usage
rate
 for other fuel sources including oil, natural gas, and
hydro power
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hydropower
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 experienced a sharp drop from 10,20 and 20
units
 to 2
units
 for all
the
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three. Moving on to the pie
charts
 related to
france
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France
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, in 1980, the highest
rate
 belongs to natural gas and coal with both having 25
units
at
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in
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 the whole share.
In addition
,
while
 nuclear power was used at 15
units
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unit
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rate
 in 1980, its usage
was surged
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surged
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 to 120
units
 in 2000. The use of oil ,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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 remained approximately the same in both 1980 and 2000 with only 5
units
 difference, being higher in 2000.
Oversal
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Overall
, comparing the
charts
 related to
australia
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Australia
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 and
france
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France
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 one significant difference is that
while
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nuclear power in
france
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France
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 was the major fuel source for electricity production in 2000. It was not used in
australia
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Australia
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 at all either in 1980 or 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, france, australia, rate, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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